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雖然現在活人應該只剩下不到十個
不過還是想徵求大大意見
這個學期有一科要寫短篇小說,而是這小說要有魔幻原素
不過我有兩個想法,不知道哪個比較好


一,狩神記(Adventure of slaying a god)
大致內容:
這個世界充斥著惡人
每年年初神會強制把所以轉送到同一個地方
把善人轉生到另一個世界
不過這會無視本人意願實行
而女主角被神說她做的事是惡人所為,但卻擁有一顆善心
神叫她再待一年才把她轉生

男主角是一個殺手
一次任務中要派去殺女主角
女主角問他,這個世界的規則是否被歪曲
男主角醒悟過來,和女主角踏上殺神之路

途中打敗巫女,獲知通往神的路
通往神的路前有擁有神的力量的守衛
勉勉強強打敗後,女主角認為打不過神
應該接受死這個事實
而在這之前又知道男主角喜歡自己
為了不讓男主角為自己犧牲和自己在轉生,即死亡的時候感到傷心
借目的其實是獲得神的守衛身上的道具為藉口
背叛了男主角

男主角覺得被欺騙了感請,本為殺手的他萌生了殺女主角的念頭
在殺死女主角後,神出來解釋來龍去脈
用影像的方法解釋女主角的想法
並說明其實這個世界是惡人的監獄
所以...
之後的事還沒想好

第二個
Cut 咁 d 改世,轉 d term ,改成英文

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雪衣   2016-9-22 21:08  BP  +10   又有活人回來了﹐所以來十卜


雪衣 (偽.文人)
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活人有多少個﹐我相信一定少過十個‥‥‥
榮哥﹐好久不見!
結論是be?還是normal ending?(表示我到現在都不明白何謂normal ending)
感覺上有點像之前那篇蕾娜蕾外傳的說(遠目)


kyron123 (皓怡淼流)
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Honor Pearl was the name before I rebirth into an angel, but now others call me Lachesis.
  However, we are angels is just because we have white wings on our backs, yet what we are doing are not like angels. Our job is killing demons and people who help demons. This is not justice at all since there are still kind people within demons. Nonetheless, we should execute the missions whenever there are commands coming from the boss. In another word, we are all murderers. In the angel community, if you don’t execute the mission as the boss said, you will be considered as a traitor and you will be dead. So we are all bound by the community.
  As a member in the angel community, there is a person working with me. That person is Krishna. Although we live together and I try to befriend with her, she seems to be estranged from me.
  Apart from the murderer’s life, I should go to school like most of the teenagers, but I don’t have any friend in school. That’s because I don’t want them to face dangerous thing…No, this is just a reason for me so I can feel more better. Actually, I am a person who even have been forgotten by the teachers. The reason may be I am not good at communication.
  I just want a friend so that I can share my thought with.
  That person exist in my life. Even even I don’t know his name, by just seeing his back. Loneliness can be a little bit relieved.
  He walks in front of me alone on the way to home almost everyday.
  The tangible distance between us seems to be miles but the emotional one is actually small.
  Why he has such power?
  I probably be love on him.
  I want to stay with him and become couples.
  But that is terrifying, what if he says no?Then, I even cannot see his back. I feel so afraid just thinking of this.
  One day, a crow flies in and leaves a piece of paper,
  “Come to my office. There is a confidential mission for you. By Dike.”
  Dike is my boss so I should pay respect and go to his office immediately.
  When I arrive, he shows me a drawing. The drawing that I am familiar with.
  Dike explains,”I want you to monitor the guy in this drawing. His name is Raphael and he is the dragon Statue holder. Unlike other Statues, dragon Statue holds dangerous power so your job is to avoid those terrifying things to happen. If he did anything near that, you must kill him.”
  The target of this mission is he, the one that walking alone. Why he holds such a dangerous Statue?
  Anyway, this mission is different from those missions I had in the past. It is just a monitoring mission not the one that I need to kill someone.
  “Yes, sir.”
  After received the mission, I am going to leave the office but Dike stops me and says,”Wait a minute, I have something to say.”
  “Yes.”
  “As you know, I am not the only executive in the community so I need to attain a meeting with others executives about this person as he might change the dynamics between us and demons, so I will leave the town a while. After the meeting, I will tell you what to do.”
  “Yes, sir.”

  At that night, when I having dinner with Krishna, the candles suddenly blows out.
  A person appears just about after that and he looks like just a shadow. So we don’t really sure who he is.
  “The instructions that I just gave you now changed. You must kill the target because we think the Statue is far more dangerous then we thought.”
  After we heard the voice, we noticed that the shadow is Dike.
  But why?  He most probably not a dangerous person.
  “However, by far, we don’t know whether he is a dangerous person or not.”I argue.
  Dike rejects,“If he become demon, we will completely lose and if he become angel, the community might be collapsed. Therefore, if he can be a threat, he cannot be lived.”
  “To avoid those scenarios happen, so you gave the monitoring mission to me. Isn’t it?” I argue again.
  Dike further rejects, “We don’t need traitors in our community. This is the final decision of the community.”
  Dike disappears and I force to accept the mission that I don’t wish for, but I know if I don’t execute the mission, he will still be dead in the hand of the other angels. Therefore, it is better for me to finish the job and end the secret crush on him.


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QUOTE:
原帖由 kyron123 於 2016-10-13 03:15 PM 發表
Honor Pearl was the name before I rebirth into an angel, but now others call me Lachesis.
  However, we are angels is just because we have white wings on our backs, yet what we are doing are not ...

基於是英文所以我真的沒啥心機看﹐但都是在此給一個讚。
真想看一下當年的文學區盛況‥‥‥可惜我太遲加入百谷了(攤手)


f19990101 (維奧娜魔魅)
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發表於 2016-10-13 22:29 
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求樓主畀個中文長篇版
(我先唔會話係想呃雪衣HBP先上水)(但真心想睇中文長篇版)


雪衣 (偽.文人)
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QUOTE:
原帖由 f19990101 於 2016-10-13 10:29 PM 發表
求樓主畀個中文長篇版
(我先唔會話係想呃雪衣HBP先上水)(但真心想睇中文長篇版)

嗯……見到中間嗰句我真係有少少想打你(不過先忍住唔好打爛自己部手機)
BP呢家嘢有咁好呃咩(笑眼)
不過贊成放中文版啊


kyron123 (皓怡淼流)
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QUOTE:
原帖由 f19990101 於 2016-10-13 22:29 發表
求樓主畀個中文長篇版
(我先唔會話係想呃雪衣HBP先上水)(但真心想睇中文長篇版)

這是英文功課,所以沒有中文版
名字有特別意思
Honor Pearl->Hoper,希望之人
Raphael->Real,真實
Krishna->勇敢之神
Dike->公平之神
所以換做中文有點難

[ 本帖最後由 kyron123 於 2016-10-14 01:47 編輯 ]


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幾正....不過咁直白咁寫小說真係可以?
(真心想知